I’m putting another short up on Amazon.

About four old widows who can’t give back a time machine…

https://www.amazon.com/No-Early-Birds-Chandler-Mackey-ebook/dp/B01LZIRWOF

17 Responses to I’m putting another short up on Amazon.

  1. Mike G September 20, 2016 at 6:28 pm #

    Pretty good!

    But about 88% of the way in, it goes from 1st person to 3rd mid conversation, and stays 3rd person?

    Also, at the end, someone is affected by the scene, when they’re not even in that part of the galaxy…

    But I enjoyed it!

    • Mac September 21, 2016 at 6:55 pm #

      Spooky huh? Just joking that last sentence was an error with the names. I’ll see if I can at least switch views at a break.
      Looked at it. I’m not comfortable staying in first person at the end. I think it is still clear what is happening so I’m leaving it.
      But changed last sentence to – It made Violet gasp in shock, but it was very satisfying, because it made everything clear to her. Thanks. I appreciate having that pointed out.

  2. Bill F September 23, 2016 at 1:10 pm #

    Sorry to bug you off subject but when do you suppose we will see a new April or Family Law? Are you working? Do you have a plan? Hope, hope, hope …. It’s always something, huh?

  3. Jack Hudler September 25, 2016 at 5:35 pm #

    This sentence in the description on Amazon is not doing you any favors.
    “When the people ahead of them drop a time machine in the driveway leaving a sale they are scrupulously honest.”

    • Mac September 25, 2016 at 8:59 pm #

      How would you change it? It’s running #1 in all science fiction short reads so it must not be hurting it too bad, but I’m open to suggestions. Or is your suggestion it gives too much away?

      • Jack Hudler September 26, 2016 at 12:09 am #

        I don’t understand what “leaving a sale they are scrupulously honest.” has to do with the first part of the sentence; it’s non-sequitur.
        The first part “When the people ahead of them drop a time machine in the driveway” stands on it’s own.
        I haven’t read the book, so I’m not sure what you’re trying to say.

        • ChuckC September 26, 2016 at 5:09 pm #

          Jack, does this clarify it for you?
          “When the people leaving a garage sale ahead of them drop a time machine in the driveway, they try to return it.”

          • Mac September 26, 2016 at 8:48 pm #

            Yes. “When the people leaving a garage sale ahead of them drop a time machine in the driveway, they try to return it.” Then: But being scrupulously honest proves to be surprisingly difficult.

            I am informed by a reader that my description was an amphiboly. That is, a statement that is ambiguous because of its grammatical structure.

        • Mac September 26, 2016 at 8:45 pm #

          I’m betting most people make the jump from a found object to demonstrating honesty vs just keeping it. But perhaps you are right – in today’s moral climate I better detail the choices.

          • Jack Hudler October 29, 2016 at 10:54 am #

            Sorry for the delay, I never received the follow up notifications.
            My point was, if your description has a sentence that is grammatically incorrect; what’s the book like?

          • Mac October 29, 2016 at 1:06 pm #

            Imperfect.

          • Jack Hudler October 29, 2016 at 8:14 pm #

            LOL Imperfect it is!

  4. Eric October 3, 2016 at 12:48 am #

    Something that always struck me about time travel is that considering that the Earth is spinning on its axis while moving around the sun and flying through space away from the center of the universe then wouldn’t moving in time without also moving great distances in space leave you floating in the middle of nowhere trying to learn how to breath vacuum?

    Also thanks for the book, I rather enjoyed it. ^^

    • Eric October 3, 2016 at 12:54 am #

      Oh and you would have to match the way the destination is moving at the time you arrive or it might end poorly… like getting flung into space or egg shot out of a cannon into a brick wall poorly.

      • Mac October 3, 2016 at 10:50 pm #

        Nah we just apply a single layer of hand wavyum to assume a temporal transition negates and resets all physical movement.

  5. Eric L. October 29, 2016 at 9:03 am #

    Huh. Now I know what an amphiboly is. The more you know…

    • Jack Hudler October 29, 2016 at 10:56 am #

      select amphiboly and right mouse and ‘Search Google for ‘amphiboly’, or copy and paste it.

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