Appears to be substandard. I’m going through it and try to clean up a lot myself. I have several people feeding me errors also. I have to admit after doing a compare of the two files my editor found mostly things I never would have caught. But the things he missed were still significant. I’m adding a ton of commas, (See there’s one!) because I have been told I hear the ‘obvious’ pauses in my own mind but others do not. Anybody who wants to tell me about the errors that bother you just give me the entire sentence, and I can find it with the search function. I will post the new version to Amazon in a day or two. – Mac’
Is there a way to send you a file with the errors marked as there were a number of them?
Other than that, one of the biggest things I noticed was what seems to be an inconsistency with a name. Is papa-san named Santos or Satos ?
Santos, thanks I did a search and replaced those. I also added a lot of commas, and found maybe a dozen errors of tense or unclosed quotes. Feel free to mail me a file at mchandler@ameritech.net – I’d appreciate them.
I’ll wait to see what you have before updating.