It’s not as bad as “April”, though it still needs a lot of commas. I have found a few missing quote marks – but nothing like “April”. I changes a couple sentences that were not clear at all. I’m at about the 30% mark.
If anybody re-reads the re-edited “April” I’d appreciate knowing if it was easier to read and enjoy.
4/17 – The book is re-edited and posted to Amazon. It should be in the system tomorrow. It takes awhile to propagate through their computers.